Poetry of a Grimm Reaper vol.1

[greace]

HI

whatever that is, it doesn't look very scary. lol

Not as scary as your avatar.

[CptCrow]

HI

whatever that is, it doesn't look very scary. lol

Not as scary as your avatar.

Why thank you

[Falcon]

*Scythe

Sorry.

Over all I like the poem a bunch. You should make more :3

[microfoam202]

I'M HERE

[demo123]

microfoam202@:Nice screen-shot.

Falcon@:I will.Expecialy since my sickness passed.

[microfoam202]

I got this pic cause i changed my name to =[G33K]NINJA!=

p.s do u want my grimreaper copy it and u can have it.

[bov930527]

I liked it. At least that was my first opinion. Especially "Spark" part. The piece gave me some interesting, although obviously not very bright, images. Unfortunately I have to agree that grammar could use some work, but an editor could easily fix that for you. I also think that you should be making longer chapters, perhaps try by writing an entire page as one story. Why? Because your piece is interesting and I hate when I read an interesting book or see an interesting movie and it all ends too fast :P

Anyways, you get 4 stars our of 5 from me, good work.

EDIT: And try to make at least some parts to rhyme. In particular the ones where you want to make a point. It will be a ton more intriguing to read then. Just an advice.

[demo123]

I liked it. At least that was my first opinion. Especially "Spark" part. The piece gave me some interesting, although obviously not very bright, images. Unfortunately I have to agree that grammar could use some work, but an editor could easily fix that for you. I also think that you should be making longer chapters, perhaps try by writing an entire page as one story. Why? Because your piece is interesting and I hate when I read an interesting book or see an interesting movie and it all ends too fast :P

Anyways, you get 4 stars our of 5 from me, good work.

EDIT: And try to make at least some parts to rhyme. In particular the ones where you want to make a point. It will be a ton more intriguing to read then. Just an advice.

Making things rhyme in English is a problem for me. I`ll try to fix grammar. I am glad that my poetry gave you some intresting images. But hey, of course that this wont give you bright images since the theme of the piece is Grimm Reaper.



Since you like poetry and books tell me what you think about this:
This is a piece i like to call Pain. I wrote this a few months ago during a Geography class(i was quite bored since the teacher was questioning us but since she questioned me already i had nothing to do so i wrote a song( with a heavy metal style added to it))

Pain, the thing that roams every soul,
Devil´s favourite meal,
The thing that God hates,
The thing death causes

Pain it´s in your body
Waiting, to be released,
Released on the surface,
To cause death

We fight against it
But, it gets stronger
Every time it´s beaten

[bov930527]

The ending was good. The rest was okay I guess. It's too short to really have an impact thought. Btw, how's it going with volume 2? Or did you abandone the idea. Would be a shame if you did, I really think you got some potential.

[demo123]

The ending was good. The rest was okay I guess. It's too short to really have an impact thought. Btw, how's it going with volume 2? Or did you abandone the idea. Would be a shame if you did, I really think you got some potential.

I havent aandoned the idea. I just need a inspiration. I dont belive that a same thing could inspire me two times(the thing that inspired me was Noturno by Antun Gustav Matoš). I need something dark, something with a feel of death added to it.